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22 December 2007 @ 05:14 pm
[fanfic] 30 First Kisses - Kiss #24 (PG)  
Title: 30 First Kisses - Kiss #24
Author: tiptoe39
Rating: PG for brief language.
Summary: "..."

This is the 24th of 30 possible ways Matt and Mohinder could share their first kiss, written for the 30_kisses challenge. The theme was "good night" (oyasumi). Previous kisses are here.



"Cockroaches! Why did it have to be cockroaches? I keep that room immaculate specifically so I won't have to deal with pests, and now I am exiled due to cockroaches. Life is absolutely not fair."

"Relax. That's why God invented the pull-out couch."

"I'm truly sorry for the imposition."

"It's no problem."

"But it's your privacy, and..."

"Mohinder. I said it's no problem. I said relax. Do you need me to start singing 'Don't Worry, Be Happy' now?"

"Right. Sorry. Good night."

"Good night."

* * *

"Do you..."

"Huh?"

"Do you ever hear dreams? Other people's, I mean?"

"Nah, not by accident. Actually, they're kind of hard to get to, even when I try. They happen kind of fast and don't make a lot of sense."

"Oh, I see. Good night."

"Good night."

* * *

"Why, what kinds of embarrassing dreams don't you want me to know about?"

"Huh? Oh. No, nothing. It's not that."

"Sure, yeah, right."

"Truly. I'd just rather not have to answer for whatever my subconscious decides to dredge up overnight."

"If you say so. Good night."

* * *

"Sometimes I dream I'm naked in front of my sixth-grade class, if that makes you feel better."

"...Actually? It does, a little. With me it's my doctoral dissertation or my undergraduate thesis defense."

"So we have that in common. Who knew?"

"It's a universal anxiety dream. It's very common."

"Still, it's a good warning. If you hear me spouting scientist-speak you'll know I've gotten into your dream somehow. Either that or I've been replaced by a robot body snatcher evil clone. Either way, you'd better run away."

"So noted. G-g-good night."

"Good night."

* * *

"Are you cold?"

"What?"

"I thought I heard your teeth chattering."

"I'm f-f-fine."

"You don't sound fine."

"I'm just a little cold. It's n-no problem."

"It's because you're so skinny. You don't have any meat on your bones. Here, why don't you climb in?"

"What!?"

"C'mon. This blanket's warmer, but I'm not willing to give it up because I'm greedy. So we'll have to share it. Plus, if you're under here too we'll have body heat."

"Do you realize what you're asking?"

"Sure I do. Relax. We're both mature enough. When was the last time you slept with someone? You know how good it is for the cold."

"I.."

"Just get your skinny butt over here before you kacha-dettha-cold, as my mother used to say."

"..."

"There, isn't that twenty times better?"

"Thirty. At least. I'd... forgotten."

"I'll bet-- oh, Jesus, your feet are cold. I'm glad you finally got in here or I'd be finding pieces of your toes on the floor tomorrow morning."

"Thank you for offering. Good night."

"Good night, Mohinder."

* * *

"So how long has it been?"

"Has what been?"

"Since you slept with a woman."

"Since, uh... since I was at university."

"You haven't had sex since you were in college?"

"I, um, didn't say that."

"...Oh."

"Do you want me to go back to the couch?"

"No, no, why would I want that?"

"Well, most people would be uncomfortable."

"What on earth for? Besides, how do you know I don't swing that way myself?"

"Because you were married."

"Well, there you go, then. Another reason not to worry about it. Good night."

* * *

"You know, there are people who swing both ways."

"I know that!"

"Just making sure. Good night."

"Good night."

* * *

"Matt?"

"Yeah?"

"Do you swing both ways?"

"...Actually? Yeah."

"What!? Why didn't you ever tell me about this?"

"Didn't think it was relevant."

"W... wh.. We live together. Why would it not be relevant?"

"You didn't tell me you liked men."

"...Point taken."

"You know, we really should get some sleep at some point."

"Yes. Yes, indeed."

"OK. I'm going to say good night one more time, and when I do, I want you to shut up and go to sleep. No more talking, got it?"

"All right, all right."

"Good. Good night."

"Good night, Matt."

"I told you to shut up and go to sleep!"

"Sorry! Sorry! Good night!"

"Good night, Mohinder."

* * *

"..."

"Mohinder?"

"..."

"Mohinder, are you asleep?

"..."

"You are asleep, right?"

"..."

"Here goes nothing, then..."

"..."

"...maybe next time I'll manage to do that when you're awake. Heh. Good night, gorgeous."

"Good night."

"SHIT! Holy shit shit you're awake shit DAMN IT!"

"I couldn't very well sleep through that."

"Shit. I'm sorry, Mohinder, oh, damn it, how do I explain... shit..."

"Do it again."

"...What?"

"Kiss me again. I liked it."

"Um, is it too hot under here? Maybe it's just me..."

"Matt. Kiss me again or I will kiss you myself."

"Actually, either of those options would kind of be OK with m..."

"..."

"...?!..."

"...There. Now I can go to sleep. Good night."

"...So, um, does that mean that..."

"Shush. I'm going to sleep."

"No, but wait, you're just going to..."

"Sleep. Yes. Now. Good night."

"But wait a minute, how can we sleep now? I mean, didn't you... did we just.. are you... um... what just happened?"

"Good night, Matt."

"..."

"..."

"...Heh. Right. Good night."

:end:

 
 
 
saavikam77: Matt/Mohinder - Minesaavikam77 on December 22nd, 2007 10:48 pm (UTC)
Heeee heeee!!! :D Dude, this was *nothing* like that other fic! :p Well, maybe in the badgering department, but not really significantly.

I loved the way they kept waking each other up with little things to add to the conversation, until Matt just demanded Mohinder go to sleep. ^_^ Too adorable. And the kiss!!! O_O Hehehe... Guess Mohinder was too sneaky for Matt, there. ^_~

Bravo, hon! :D *hugs you*

And.... I'm sorry if it seemed like I was bullying you into posting. *is embarrassed* Can you forgive me? O_O
Tiptoe39: cmere youtiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:15 am (UTC)
Oh, you're fine, hon. Thank you for giving me the courage to post. I was scared I'd get accused of plagiarism or something (having been the victim of it long ago, I'm sensitive to making sure I never inflict that awful feeling on anyone). So thank you!

And oh my god that icon. Greg & Sendhil really must love us. You think they read M/M fanfics? mujajaja :D
Moral Whiplash: acidicbkwyrm on December 22nd, 2007 10:55 pm (UTC)
That was adorable! Mohinder would have cold feet, too.
Tiptoe39: sendhiltiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:13 am (UTC)
yes, there's definitely some circulation problems. Probably has to do with the fact that he never exercises.... that gorgeous body is just all-natural..

:has lust attack: :falls over:
Veet Voojagigveetvoojagig on December 22nd, 2007 10:57 pm (UTC)
That was just LOVELY. I adore dialog fics when they're done well. Good job!
Tiptoe39: pridetiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:13 am (UTC)
oh good. I'm so glad you consider it done well ^_^
The Soul says: - veetvoojagig on December 23rd, 2007 05:14 am (UTC) (Expand)
Madam Morrighanmadmogs on December 22nd, 2007 11:17 pm (UTC)
That was so cool! And hilarious! You have fabulous comedic timing here.

"You know, there are people who swing both ways." *loves*
Tiptoe39: huhtiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:12 am (UTC)
comedic timing? you must have me confused with someone who didn't inherit the worst sense of humor ever known to mankind..... Oh well, I'll take it!

(and sorry, dad!)
Renéerogueslayer452 on December 22nd, 2007 11:37 pm (UTC)
This is a very uniquely written structure. All dialogue leaving us to imagine what's going on, especially during the ellipses. Hee! Cute and different. :D
Tiptoe39: shiontiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:12 am (UTC)
:mysterious voice: I want to leave a little to the imagination.... consider it literary lingerie... :pffft: :sporfles:
teecub on December 22nd, 2007 11:41 pm (UTC)
Haha! LOVELY! A first kiss written totally in dialogue! Mmmmmm! You did a great job on it, too. You have them mastered so well that I could start just about anywhere and know who you were writing! <3
Tiptoe39: huhtiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:11 am (UTC)
or you could just look at the author's name and guess exactly who I was writing.... ^_^;;; but thanks :D
Kinda Insaneebonyguitarchic on December 23rd, 2007 12:59 am (UTC)
I don't know what it is but I'm always weak for a dialogue only story. I think this in possibly my favorite kiss out of the whole bunch so far but don't quote me on that.
Tiptoe39: chaotiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:11 am (UTC)
aww, don't worry i won't :D
zoedriverzoedriver on December 23rd, 2007 01:21 am (UTC)
I fell in love with this!*loveslovesloves*
Tiptoe39: pridetiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:10 am (UTC)
:loveslovesloves: you right back! :D
The Soul says: - zoedriver on December 23rd, 2007 10:57 am (UTC) (Expand)
The Soul says: - tiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 12:09 pm (UTC) (Expand)
The Soul says: - zoedriver on December 23rd, 2007 02:25 pm (UTC) (Expand)
The Soul says: - tiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 02:50 pm (UTC) (Expand)
The Soul says: - zoedriver on December 23rd, 2007 02:54 pm (UTC) (Expand)
ilsaluvsrickilsaluvsrick on December 23rd, 2007 01:55 am (UTC)
Loved!

I don't know how you manage so many different styles so effortlessly! Another success.
Tiptoe39: caketiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:10 am (UTC)
ahahaha thanks darling! I was nervous 'bout this one, ok, so I'm nervous about a lot of them, buuuuut.... :D

Side note: Can you believe these kisses are 65,000+ words so far?! holy crapoly. That's about as much as I've written the past ten YEARS before i got obsessed with this pairing.

So what did you bake tonight?
The Soul says: - ilsaluvsrick on December 23rd, 2007 07:04 pm (UTC) (Expand)
Jessiejessieflower on December 23rd, 2007 02:03 am (UTC)
This is different (in an amazing way). Good job!
Tiptoe39: pridetiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:09 am (UTC)
thanks :-)
crystal_mkcrystal_mk on December 23rd, 2007 02:19 am (UTC)
LOL, I love that style. Those two are such adorable goof balls!

They way they keep talking to each other after they say goodnight, such a married couple.

I love this so much I'm reduced to giggles and compulsive hugging!

*huggles*
Tiptoe39: cmere youtiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:08 am (UTC)
They are soooo married.
himhilien: Heroes - HRGhimhilien on December 23rd, 2007 03:15 am (UTC)
This was very cut, and I usually am turned off by dialogue only fics. Another success for you! ^_^
Tiptoe39: pridetiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:08 am (UTC)
oh, excellent. I'm glad to hear it.
redorchard13redorchard13 on December 23rd, 2007 05:04 am (UTC)
well THAT was fun!!!
"Sleep. Yes. Now. Good night."
*giggles*

and WAAAA you've made me homesick for college. dormsick. or whatever. i miss being in a pitch-black room, about to drift off, when a disembodied voice asks from under my bunk, "Hey...did you ever dissect a pig in highschool?"
or whatever.
Tiptoe39: boredtiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:08 am (UTC)
That was exactly the mood I was going for. Yayz.
roseclawroseclaw on December 23rd, 2007 05:30 am (UTC)
Yay! That was adorable. It's like an adult sleepover... Oh, wait, that's called marriage or college. Either way, sex will be involved at some point. Yay!

Because I need to point it out: You typo-ed:
Just get your skinny butt over here
Tiptoe39: rentiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 05:40 am (UTC)
Copy editing is always appreciated ^_^

thank you!
plotbunny_tiffplotbunny_tiff on December 23rd, 2007 06:53 am (UTC)
Worthy of the phrase adorkable!

Gold star for the way you keep the dialouge from becoming stilted or corney. Once again your deft had with their voices comes shining through.

I don't know what I'll do when the Kisses are over...other than re-read them, of course.
Tiptoe39: kensei & hiro singtiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 02:58 pm (UTC)
You don't know what *you'll* do? :laff:

Thank you so much. I love shiny gold stars!! :D
Easy To Amuse, Hard To Pleasestarlingthefool on December 23rd, 2007 07:43 am (UTC)
Aww. And YAY! I'm grinning like a fool, now.
Tiptoe39: squeetiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 02:58 pm (UTC)
oh good. that way you are worthy of your username :snerk:
carma_babycarma_baby on December 23rd, 2007 08:20 am (UTC)
As someone who is terrified of writing dialogue, I commend you tons. I loved that it was easy to picture what was going on, and I could almost picture the looks on their faces even without you describing them.

Yet another gem in the pile. Thank you for sharing, my dear, and I can't wait for the next one.
Tiptoe39: pridetiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 02:59 pm (UTC)
Thank you, that means so much :-)
eide_oconradeide_oconrad on December 23rd, 2007 10:53 am (UTC)
*______________* It is the imagine of cuteness!
Tiptoe39: chaotiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 02:59 pm (UTC)
No, the thing in my icon is the image of cuteness. This is just a fic. :snerk:
imeru on December 23rd, 2007 11:43 am (UTC)
Oh my God, this was way too hard to stand for my due-to-Xmas-sugar-filled brain. Cute.
Tiptoe39: caketiptoe39 on December 23rd, 2007 02:59 pm (UTC)
Sorry. I will e-mail you a toothbrush. :D
twillerytwillery on December 26th, 2007 05:53 am (UTC)
ahahah, this was adorable, thank you!^^
Tiptoe39: chaotiptoe39 on December 26th, 2007 01:34 pm (UTC)
thank YOU!
apology_dance: zoidbergapology_dance on December 26th, 2007 07:57 am (UTC)
That was delightfully unexpected. I haven't seen anyone attempt dialogue fic in a while.
Tiptoe39: matthindertiptoe39 on December 26th, 2007 01:34 pm (UTC)
I think these guys lend themselves to dialogue fic remarkably well. They both have such a way with language.

Hope the attempt worked out OK for you ;-D
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Tiptoe39: matt mind meldtiptoe39 on December 28th, 2007 03:37 pm (UTC)
So glad you enjoyed. Altho that was Matt, unless Matt has done a doctoral dissertation and we're just unaware of it. :D
britkit27: Heroes meowbritkit27 on November 17th, 2008 05:33 pm (UTC)
*dies*
that was adorable. I love how you could totally tell who was talking, even though it was all diologe. and its so THEM. *luvs*